Ge-ge-ge no nyobou 8/18

a.k.a. here's what really happened...

Shigeru handed Fumie the old manga. She looked at the page he had been studying. "A war story by Shigeru Mizuki?" He nodded. "Is this the one that Matsukawa was talking about? She wants you to write a sequel?" He leaned back. "Yes. But it's not just a war story. This was what really happened to me." He looked up at her, and said, "Here, sit down." She pulled a chair over and sat down.
( In the jungle... )

Then Fumie frowned at Aiko. "You know, after they talk about old times, your father is likely to want to move to the southern islands again?" Aiko said, "That's okay. Actually, that might be good. No school, no tests..."

<to be continued>

Writing Excuses Season Four Episode 32: First Paragraphs

Writing Excuses Season Four Episode 32: First Paragraphs

From http://www.writingexcuses.com/2010/08/15/writing-excuses-4-32-first-paragraphs/

Key Points: conflict and tension are good. Be careful of personification. Voice is OK, but get to scene and setting soon. Action! Sensory experience! Clarity. Put backstory in dialogue, action, and setting. Make sure we know who the viewpoint character is soon.
( actual 1st paragraphs... )

[Brandon] We're going to go ahead and end with a writing prompt, which is what Dan said. You're writing in a journal, and you haven't written it in 10 years. Then you say, "Oh, man, OK. What happened? Earth got invaded. Well, let's start from there." Do this story, but do it silly. This has been Writing Excuses. You're out of excuses, now go write. OK, and we're out.
[Dan] Yeah.
[Applause]
[Howard] Don't stop recording, there's applause.
[Brandon] Louder, louder.